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I think I might need you

and the light that you bring

but I'm out of control and

I can't feel a thing.


I can't feel a thing

and it's making me sick

I think I might need you but

it's all just a trick


It's all just a trick

and alone here I'm sat

There's no one around and

it's cold in my flat


It's cold in my flat

and my knees keep on shaking

There're ghosts in the walls and

my heart keeps on breaking


My heart keeps on breaking

and it's sad that it's true

I think I might need you but

that's nothing new.
:icontherainontheirparade:
WELP
see I can't do, like, rhyming poetry well.
EVERYTHING I WRITE SOUNDS CORNY
/flips a table

but I kind of felt like stretching my brain a little bit away from the Marine Biology exam I'm cramming for

so I wrote this.

I hope it's not completely awful sos
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:icondevoneaton:
=DevonEaton Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Can't do rhyming well? Pish Posh, what a lie; this is brilliant! And a quick hint if you get stuck on a rhyme, there is this amazing rhyming dictionary I use online and as an app on my phone called b-rhymes. It comes in uber-handy. You should try it out.
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:icontherainontheirparade:
Aw >.<
Thank you kindly, dear. (':

Oh! That sounds really handy. I'll look it up. Thank you very much!! <3
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:iconpoetshand:
Oh! Wonderful ending!
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:icontherainontheirparade:
Ah, really? ;//w//; Thank you so much! C:
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:iconxxboneless:
~xxBoneless Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is a great one. :)
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:icontherainontheirparade:
Ah, thank you very much!! :D
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:iconxxboneless:
~xxBoneless Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome! :)
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:iconrainbowshroom:
~RainbowShroom Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It not completely awful at all!
It's just a different kind of rhyme format you've used, it's good though.
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:icontherainontheirparade:
Ah! Thank you kindly. C':

I really appreciate it and I'm glad you thought it was good ;w;

<3
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:iconrainbowshroom:
~RainbowShroom Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome.
All of your stuff is good! Even the bad stuff, viewed by someone else can be seen as good. So every piece is always great.
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